I Don't Like Bedtimes!

Hello everyone! This is my story I am aiming to fully illustrate by christmas. I had a lot of fun doing it this way but I'd be grateful for any thoughts regarding what I've done. The imagery I am aiming towards is photorealism contrasted with some of my usual stuff. I'm waiting on a really good source book so I can get my faces looking just as I want them so at the mo I'm just drawing to keep me in shape. Let me know what you think!

I Don't Like Bedtimes!

I don't like bedtimes, they make me feel bad,

I get all hot and bothered and that makes me mad.

I toss and I turn and I get all fed up!

Then Dad comes with cocoa in my favourite cup.

"I'm not ready to sleep!" I yell at my Dad.

He tells me I must and that makes me sad.

But I could not drop off, try as I might,

This time I thought, I'd be up all night.

I got up in the morning feeling totally rotten,

Mum's told me before but I must have forgotten.

"If you moan and groan on your way up to bed,

You'll wake in the morn like a bear with a sore head!

But if you skip up to bed with a big cheesey grin,

You'll be right off to sleep before Dad tucks you in!"

I sloped off to school feeling dreadful that morning,

I sat at my desk and thought of Mum's warning.

Too tired to learn made my schoolday a chore,

I needed some sleep, my bed I longed for.

So when I went off to bed, later that night,

Dad gave me a kiss and tucked me in tight.

"And remember sweet dreams when you close your eyes!"

But I'd already gone, and that's no surprise!

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Any comments would be great guys thanks!