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Thursday 14 May 2009
First page for freddie
This is more or less my final first page for freddie. there are few things i'm not happy with like the perspective just looks a bit odd and the type is a little cramped. any comments?
It's a beautiful drawing! I think the perspective is very inventive and you should keep it that way, however I think one of the reasons you think it looks odd maybe is cos the nose is drawn as if we're looking at it from the side - yet we are viewing the rest of freddie's face more or less from straight on. maybe if the nose was tweaked a lil bit it will make the perspective make more sense? that be my friendly advice, feel free to ignore it though lol :)
oh and as for the type, maybe do what cherry did with her type and have the image fade slightly around it ? it would create the illusion of more space. if you get me..
actually yeah i dint realise that- his shnozzle is a little off. yeah i might try that with the type- i took some cheeky leafage out but its still a bit cosy up there. thanks :) x x
It's a beautiful drawing! I think the perspective is very inventive and you should keep it that way, however I think one of the reasons you think it looks odd maybe is cos the nose is drawn as if we're looking at it from the side - yet we are viewing the rest of freddie's face more or less from straight on. maybe if the nose was tweaked a lil bit it will make the perspective make more sense?
ReplyDeletethat be my friendly advice, feel free to ignore it though lol :)
oh and as for the type, maybe do what cherry did with her type and have the image fade slightly around it ? it would create the illusion of more space. if you get me..
nay xxx
actually yeah i dint realise that- his shnozzle is a little off. yeah i might try that with the type- i took some cheeky leafage out but its still a bit cosy up there. thanks :) x x
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