Tuesday, 30 March 2010

test. and advice?

Sorry for the double post, but I'm after a bit of help on this piece. It's just a rough so I haven't included text. Basically in the sea it will read 'But then the whale said' -
The boy has pretty much given up and the whale is pointing out that he has actually got a friend in the octopus on his head. Whey!
My concerns are...is the image too flat? I didnt want too much to be going on what with all this pattern and incorporated text?
Also, I'm not sure wether or not to do the sea in the thicker pen or the thin pen?

Anything you want to point out is more then welcome :)
cheers, lou xx


  1. you could afford to show a bit more whale - or make him bigger? But really I'm quite happy with the overall composition - it's the tweaking and details that are included which will elevate it or not. But this is where it gets difficult as I can't see any major flaws - though I'm not a fan of those vertical black lines behind the boy.

    Can't wait to see the final one!

  2. yeah, i don't like those lines either. Won't be putting them into the final!
    I was thinking about pulling the cliff a little more inward therefore allowing a little more room for the whale and the sea. Guess i'll do a few more tests and just get on with it...


  3. yeah id make it a little more intimate (not a gay boy-and-whale hug session) but alittle closer so theres more whaleage and a little less of greyness in the middle of the page.
    i dont know about the blue thing around the whale or is it part of he story??